Glass Fish Rhythm Great + Bad + Bad = Not so good
3 things to rate a game by are graphics, story, and most importantly gameplay.
While its a great sign to see a game with a worthwhile story on newgrounds...finally, the gameplay of this is quite slow and fiddly. While graphics are of least importance, the blockiness is a particular style that im not sure is 100% appropriate for this gameplay style. +8 for story, -3 for gameplay, -1 for graphics.
Keep it up though! U have the potential for a great game in you!
Canabalt